hows this

[Grover_mister]

i have never read somtin as good as the bible thing and i have changed my style and so forth

now u all know for the last couple of days i have been talking to a girl and asked her to chill and she said sure... now i have devised a message that has been un-sent... now tell me how is this for asking her out (using tips i have learned)


"sometime this week or next u gonna come an over and swim wit me and chill,watch a movie go out for a walk or somtin and we are going to have a blast

i got a car (my truck is getting repaired and i might drive my dads truck or somtin cuz the car aint anything special)

so dont make any plans cuz soon we are gonna chill"

 

[benjiprice]

i have never read somtin as good as the bible thing and i have changed my style and so forth

now u all know for the last couple of days i have been talking to a girl and asked her to chill and she said sure... now i have devised a message that has been un-sent... now tell me how is this for asking her out (using tips i have learned)

Don't send a message. If there were already something between you ok, but at this point you wanna show you have the balls to tell her with your own voice.

"sometime this week or next u gonna come an over and swim wit me and chill,watch a movie go out for a walk or somtin and we are going to have a blast

Wait, so what are you gonna do? When are you gonna do it? It's ok to give her some options but don't give her too many. See it sounds like you're trying too hard to find something she wants to do and a day she's free. How about "Saturday or Sunday I'm going swimming. You should come or come with". That indicates that you're going swimming regardless of her. She's an afterthought.

Also, unless you regularly talk to each other using "wit" or "somtin", use complete words

i got a car (my truck is getting repaired and i might drive my dads truck or somtin cuz the car aint anything special)

I don't really understand why you mention this? If there's a doubt whether you have a car, just slip it in. "I'm driving to the lake for a swim".

so dont make any plans cuz soon we are gonna chill"

So she shouldn't make plans for this week or the next? Again, give her a specific date or two. If she has plans already, she'll tell you. If she doesn't, and she's interested, it's a given that she won't make other plans.

Anyway, just some thoughts. Don't overthink things either or you'll freeze. You'll make mistakes, but that'll just make you better.
Keep it up and take her down!

 

[Grover_mister]

thank u