"The Kiss of Death Mistake"

You replay the conversation at 2 a.m. She texted back fast yesterday. Today, nothing. Was that smile friendly or flirty? What did the shoulder touch mean?

Every hour you spend decoding her signals drains your confidence and hands her the controls. Women can sense that insecurity from across the room — and it repels them.

One of the "22 Rules" kills the obsession on the spot: assume she likes you, and act accordingly. Sounds too simple. Works anyway.

Her interest tends to rise to meet your expectations. Psychologists call it a self-fulfilling prophecy.

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'The Don Juan' - Comic Book style!!!!

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The twilight sky reigns supreme over the landscape, a cascade of red, orange and purple. A large globular orange florescene slowing dying at the far edge of the horizon and disappearing into oblivion.

Michael Tam wakes up with a black eye, amongst the concrete jungle, exhaling a breath of pain, condensing the cold, dry air sorrounding him. He makes an effort to strike a cigerette, strangely already placed in his hands. He takes a drag from his cigerette and savours the almost orgasmic sensation of nicotine. He tries to find another cigerette on his body to feed his addiction, to no avail.

"This is my last cigerette, and it is ashing fast". He checks his wallet for some money....any money.

Empty wallet-A crumpled, blood-stained piece of paper was all that was found in his wallet where the green's should be. A number was written on the piece of paper with the numbers 1-212. The 5th digit, quarter completed, a violent indentation of the paper where the pen tried to write, indicating a struggle.

"Blood?!" hesitant, Michael takes a closer look at the piece of paper, turning it back and forth- nothing, just the errie numbers. A cold sweat, a flood of adrenaline saturates Michael's body in an instant.

"What have I done" as he stared at the skyline with glaring eyes. "I went to club blue last night" flashes of vibrant colours and images floods his memory as he tries to collect the fragments of memories of last night, then suddenly, a dark figure in the realms of his mind slowly walks closer uneveningly and sickly, beckoning for forgivness. His rememberance, interuppted by the obtrusive ring of his cell phone.

The caller ID states.......911.

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"The Coffee Shop Girl You Never Spoke To"

You've replayed it a hundred times. She stood three feet away, scrolling her phone. You had an opening. You composed the perfect line — after she was gone.

For all you know, she's married now. To some guy who said something. Anything.

Openers are cheap. Almost any sentence works when it's delivered within three seconds. The expensive part is the standing there, drafting and deleting, while the window quietly closes.

The "22 Rules" stripped out my hesitation. What to open with, how to keep it alive, and the one habit that costs guys more women than anything else: waiting for perfect.

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OK, I offended people sorry

The writings fine, a bit flowery maybe, but its good and interesting. keep it up.
But why is it on this website? we don't need a Don Juan novel do we, at least put it in anything else forum to stop people like me complaining.
 
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I think it is pretty good, you have a a knack for writing and detail....I would like to read more.
 

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Youngblood, don't let these tools dismay you from writing or doing whatever you enjoy. I like it. You've set a good pace right off the bat and there is a dangerous subtext. One suggestion is to not focus on the protagonist as a DJ but as a man searching for himself. Don't box your characters in. Instead, give them free reign to roam around your subconscious, you'll be surprised what they do next.

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“The 22 Psychological Triggers That Make Women Chase You… Starting Tonight”

Forget the cash, the cars, and the chiseled jawlines. Female desire operates on a completely different frequency. Primal. Subconscious. Triggers that bypass her logic and hit her on a gut level. Most guys are totally blind to them.

I know because I was one of them. The overthinking. The paralysis. The silent drive home kicking yourself for freezing up. Watching average guys walk away with the girl while you stood there stuck in your own head.

Then I decoded the psychology behind what actually makes women tick. 22 hard rules.  Subtle behavioral shifts that rewired my entire reality. The anxiety evaporated. Women started leaning in. Investing. Chasing.

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Axcell

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Haha, keep it up. Pretty detailed, as if I am reading an english paper.
 
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