"She Wants a Man, Not a Boy"

You asked her if she wanted to grab coffee. Then you asked if the time worked. Then you asked if the place was okay. Then you asked if she'd prefer tea.

Four questions. Four chances for her to say no. Four signals that you're terrified of making a decision.

Plan it. Pick the place. Pick the time. Tell her where to meet you. She'll either show up or she won't.

Either way, you look like a man instead of a scared little boy.

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'The Don Juan' - Comic Book style!!!!

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The twilight sky reigns supreme over the landscape, a cascade of red, orange and purple. A large globular orange florescene slowing dying at the far edge of the horizon and disappearing into oblivion.

Michael Tam wakes up with a black eye, amongst the concrete jungle, exhaling a breath of pain, condensing the cold, dry air sorrounding him. He makes an effort to strike a cigerette, strangely already placed in his hands. He takes a drag from his cigerette and savours the almost orgasmic sensation of nicotine. He tries to find another cigerette on his body to feed his addiction, to no avail.

"This is my last cigerette, and it is ashing fast". He checks his wallet for some money....any money.

Empty wallet-A crumpled, blood-stained piece of paper was all that was found in his wallet where the green's should be. A number was written on the piece of paper with the numbers 1-212. The 5th digit, quarter completed, a violent indentation of the paper where the pen tried to write, indicating a struggle.

"Blood?!" hesitant, Michael takes a closer look at the piece of paper, turning it back and forth- nothing, just the errie numbers. A cold sweat, a flood of adrenaline saturates Michael's body in an instant.

"What have I done" as he stared at the skyline with glaring eyes. "I went to club blue last night" flashes of vibrant colours and images floods his memory as he tries to collect the fragments of memories of last night, then suddenly, a dark figure in the realms of his mind slowly walks closer uneveningly and sickly, beckoning for forgivness. His rememberance, interuppted by the obtrusive ring of his cell phone.

The caller ID states.......911.

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“The 22 Rules That Turned Me From Invisible to Irresistible With Women… Starting Tonight”

You can skip the expensive cars, the fancy clothes, and the endless gym selfies. Completely unnecessary.

I used to freeze the second a beautiful woman looked my way. Frustrated. Awkward. Watching other guys walk away with the girl while I stood there tongue-tied.

Then I discovered 22 simple rules that rewired my entire dating life. The anxiety vanished. Conversations flowed effortlessly. Women started chasing me for a change.

These rules trigger a woman's subconscious attraction switches. And you can start using them tonight.

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OK, I offended people sorry

The writings fine, a bit flowery maybe, but its good and interesting. keep it up.
But why is it on this website? we don't need a Don Juan novel do we, at least put it in anything else forum to stop people like me complaining.
 
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I think it is pretty good, you have a a knack for writing and detail....I would like to read more.
 

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Youngblood, don't let these tools dismay you from writing or doing whatever you enjoy. I like it. You've set a good pace right off the bat and there is a dangerous subtext. One suggestion is to not focus on the protagonist as a DJ but as a man searching for himself. Don't box your characters in. Instead, give them free reign to roam around your subconscious, you'll be surprised what they do next.

Keep it going.
 

"You'll Never Feel READY to Walk Over"

Next Monday you'll feel more confident. After the gym you'll feel more confident. After one more drink you'll feel more confident. After you get a better haircut, a better jacket, a better job.

You've been "getting ready" for two years.

She's standing ten feet away right now. She'll be gone in four minutes. No amount of preparation will manufacture the courage that only comes from moving your feet.

Walk over. Stumble through the first sentence. Let it be clumsy. Let it be imperfect. You will feel more alive in those ten seconds than you have all month.

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Haha, keep it up. Pretty detailed, as if I am reading an english paper.
 
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