Originally posted by al77
How can anyone answer that? We look at profiles from our male perspective...Sure thing for women: a great pic, $$ or hint on $$ and c&f. I dont have $$ so it all boils down to c&f.
Do you agree?
The problem with this approach is that I personally don't care how c&f my profile is...if I were a woman I would not I respond to c&f?? I have no answer, it doesn't make sense to me: want funny, look at Jay Leno's show.. want ****y: talk to some arrogant dudes... so I cannot understand how women think withotu some additional reading. But even after I have read lots of stuff, all I know is women want c&f, confident guys.
But that knowledge does help to answer your question: I cannot judge if the profile is compelling...I could say if it is c&f though it would not make it compelling from my point of view.
Conclusion: should I just go for c&f profile and forget about eveything else?
from this and your other posts, you are too fixated on $$$--that is, that you need to project a lot of it to bag a chick. chicks like successful guys, no doubt. but it's not the $$$ per se, but the man who got himself into that position. aside from modest dinners, i don't spend jack on chicks. so, i'm on equal par with a guy who makes 30k a year, aren't i?
you shouldn't go for C&F if it isn't your style. you'll be figured out PDQ, and won't get a second date.
what is compelling to a woman? interesting, secure, confident, humorous, good looking, going somewhere in life, and doesn't NEED women, but WANTS them. that pretty much sums it up. all within the context of how YOU feel about these things. play your strengths...so again,
What Is Compelling About YOU? good.
vs.
What Do I Think She Will Think, Is Compelling About You? bad.
this is an advertisement. sell yourself, sell your world, invite her into it, with your own style. if a particular chick or group of chicks doesn't care for what you have to sell, you don't want to waste your time with her anyway.
for example, some don't care for the "rebel" or the ****y or even the "exciting" and would prefer a home-body. if you try to sell yourself as the ****y type, well...you are merely substituting one group of chicks who like that, for another group who doesn't. worse still, it's the wrong group you are targeting if you are not in fact the ****y type.
bottom line: it isn't about HER, it's about YOU. you'll be getting into dangerous territory if you write a personal, based upon what YOU think women want. that is the main problem that guys have.
here is your original personal ad, and a quick re-write if i may...
original:
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I'll give you not very positive bits first, if you get through them you'll remember the good bits! I can "sing" in a bathroom (no, I don't do karaoke while taking a shower) I am not a good cook especially without a book, I am not a big fan of tv+sports+beer combination. That's as much as I'm giving away right now. The good bits: well I am honest, I could be witty, I think differently. I've got hazel green eyes and an inquisitive mind. I love art, I can draw anything but you would be laughing too hard at it. I have tried mountain climbing and I love the feeling of touching the earth. I grew up in Europe and have an accent, but I do not sound like James Bond or Terminator. I like dogs more than cats, cats more than mice. I favor wine over beer and dislike pop. I love thinking and having a good conversation. I have a psychology related hobby: figuring out what makes people tick, how about you?
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too negative. it's like Ford saying, "Fords are so great, but they're cr@ppy too...but you should buy one anyway!"
your first sentance, screams, "go away".
too AFC. in that you are saying, "that's all i'm giving away right now", but then you go on and give away a bunch of stuff.
too UNFUNNY. it's obvious that you are trying to project some humor, which is good, but to me it's not coming off that way.
too BORING. you are BORING! (projecting it).
re-write...just off the top of my head, literally two minute re-write, and projecting positivity. i don't know you from Adam, but i'll take what you said as true, and just pluck some things and put the "right" spin on it.
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I prefer museum-hopping, good food, excellent grape juice, new experiences, and witty dialog over the TV + sports + beer, vibe. Although...I know what the goal posts are, and I do have a few Newcastles in the fridge.
I grew up in Europe [insert specifcs] and am fluent in [language(s)]. I have smoldering hazel green eyes and an accent that can melt steel. Well, maybe butter.
I love to travel. My favorite place is [insert exotic destination, and why].
Care to join me?
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i'm not claiming that my version will get you chicks. but my re-write is definitely more "attractive", and perhaps even more accurate?
it's a better vibe isn't it? more compelling?
"Care to join me?"...Marketing 101---A Call To Action. put whatever you feel is best.
