Ok read this and tell me what you think

[kentgraham10]

Hey guys.

Ok, I have gotten around to reading this DJ Bible and here's the deal...
I made a Plenty Of Fish account mmk...The name of the account is "DaSupaPowazz" and I it goes something like this...

Headline: I've got a boner. Get some!

Interests: Women

Description: Name's Kent.

I'm a man. So yeah, my schlong is coming up with crazy ideas. If it helps, I'm a "playa", Oh! And also...I'm not looking for an "Internet relationship" but if you email me, be prepared to at least give me some revealing pictures.

What am I looking for?

What I'm looking for is...(Drum roll)...someone with a vagina! OMG!! No kidding!

I'm growing tired of liberated woman, as in, girls who won't do and won't like what they're TOLD to, and pretty much have an imagination of their own. If you're someone who is like this and you won't "fit in" then you're probably a dirty feminist. (Yes, I know, I'm ranting...I rant...)

Oh! One more detail! ..."family, friends, school" in almost that exact order is written on like 80% of all female profiles here in Internet. And it's getting a tiny bit old. If it's written on YOUR profile don't get your undies in a bunch, just leave them off and I might forget your terrible mistake.

Oh! Another one MORE detail!! I'm not looking simply to increase my social circle a bit. I'm not necessarily looking to "date" either...HOWEVER, I AM here to get it in.

!!Warning!! Minimum of maturity required, Despite my profile...know I've outgrown schoolyard behavior, just figured I'd tell ya now. Really, it's true... honest! Please believe me!

First Encounter: What am I? A fortune teller!? Because I already can tell you like what you see. Using a basketball analogy, I'll be the coach, I'll get our players in position to win the game. When the time starts winding down, just don't mess with nature and start a tsunami that will mess up my game winning shot.

I mean really....Am I the only one who thinks "waiting until the third date" or "let's get to know each other" is getting a bit old?

(So, what do you guys think? Good...Bad...many typos..etc...)

 

[evansblue]

Dude, I literally cringed reading that and had to stop halfway.

 

[kentgraham10]

I borrowed heavily from my good friend, editing it to fit my personality of course:

http://www.sosuave.net/forum/showthread.php?t=187831

 

[romangod]

I'm an man. So yeah, my schlong is coming up with crazy ideas. If it helps, I'm a "playa", Oh! And also...I'm not looking for an "Internet relationship" but if you email me, be prepared to at least give me some revealing pictures.

What am I looking for?

What I'm looking for is...(Drum roll)...someone with a vagina! OMG!! No kidding!

I'm growing tired of liberated woman, as in, girls who won't do and won't like what their TOLD to, and pretty much have an imagination of their own. If your someone who is like this and you won't "fit in" then your probably a dirty feminist. (Yes, I know, I'm ranting...I rant...)


(So, what do you guys think? Good...Bad...many typos..etc...)

It should be "a" man and "you're" instead of "your".


"You're" is the contraction for "you are". "Your" is the possessive.


Beyond that, it's okay.



Cheers!

 

[kentgraham10]

Edited and TY sir

 

[romangod]

I'm growing tired of liberated woman, as in, girls who won't do and won't like what their TOLD to,

(So, what do you guys think? Good...Bad...many typos..etc...)

I missed one.

It should be "they're" instead of "their". "They're" is also a contraction of "they are" while "their" is also possessive.


Cheers!

 

[cola]

Profiles creepy whats the point? Sounds like sex Is all you think about like you have no life. Hope the profile is just for kicks and not looking for a lay. Whatever just my 2 cents. It goes too far against the grain. it stands out which I'm sure is what you wanted but in a creepy way..

 

[kentgraham10]

Roman, at age 52, if you are not in academia, I would get on it immediately.

 

[kentgraham10]

And Cola I can understand your point, what are some areas that should be adjusted?