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Master Don Juan
Prone to Failure translated into one word?
As in regard to an Ipod, "unreliable" would work.
As in regard to an Ipod, "unreliable" would work.
“The 22 Rules That Turned Me From Invisible to Irresistible With Women… Starting Tonight”
You can skip the expensive cars, the fancy clothes, and the endless gym selfies. Completely unnecessary.
I used to freeze the second a beautiful woman looked my way. Frustrated. Awkward. Watching other guys walk away with the girl while I stood there tongue-tied.
Then I discovered 22 simple rules that rewired my entire dating life. The anxiety vanished. Conversations flowed effortlessly. Women started chasing me for a change.
These rules trigger a woman's subconscious attraction switches. And you can start using them tonight.
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My public school uses a program that does that, just so you knowHandyAndy said:Haha, i didnt even know there was a program like that
Avoid slang. Bear in mind that formality and artistic flair are not mutually exclusive. For instance, your sentence could be improved by writing "I still greet and mingle with my friends in the overcrowded and moldy hallways."
Also, avoid contractions. Not only are the absense of contractions more formal but you get a higher word count.