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Master Don Juan
Prone to Failure translated into one word?
As in regard to an Ipod, "unreliable" would work.
As in regard to an Ipod, "unreliable" would work.
"She Wants a Man, Not a Boy"
You asked her if she wanted to grab coffee. Then you asked if the time worked. Then you asked if the place was okay. Then you asked if she'd prefer tea.
Four questions. Four chances for her to say no. Four signals that you're terrified of making a decision.
Plan it. Pick the place. Pick the time. Tell her where to meet you. She'll either show up or she won't.
Either way, you look like a man instead of a scared little boy.
Critique my essay
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"She Made Her Decision Before You Finished Your Sentence"
Three seconds. That's how long it took. Your shoes. Your posture. The way you held your drink. Whether you looked at the floor or looked at her.
She already filed you away. Interesting. Boring. Safe. Bold. Before you even opened your mouth.
Everything you say after that is just her confirming what she already decided.
So stop rehearsing lines. Fix the first three seconds. Stand tall. Look up. Smile like you mean it. Walk like you belong wherever you're standing.
The words come later. The impression comes first.
In Motion
Senior Don Juan
My public school uses a program that does that, just so you knowHandyAndy said:Haha, i didnt even know there was a program like that
Avoid slang. Bear in mind that formality and artistic flair are not mutually exclusive. For instance, your sentence could be improved by writing "I still greet and mingle with my friends in the overcrowded and moldy hallways."
Also, avoid contractions. Not only are the absense of contractions more formal but you get a higher word count.