Yo, Asking OUt a Girl -- Criticism or improvements

[KneghtRyder]

18yrold chick told me to hit her up on it ( the email)..I asked for her number but she only gave me her email.. but you guys see i am a noob, college closes this monday, and I don't know where she'd like to go so I am thinking of typing this letter to her ;


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Yo hi kelly,

This is Vin. We Met the other day in the Science Wing.

You sound like a really cool chick; and I think I can help you out with your science final.

You and me have alot in common, I would to get to know you better, How about we

met for some Coffee Sometime at the StarBucks on Route 101 after finals ( which day/ time is better for you

Wed/Thursday/Friday 3pm , 6 pm or 9 pm)..


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( i am not going to ask for her address to pick her up , as she didnt even give me her phone number)
( i made the shyt up about having something in common or help ing her out )


did I do this right, how can I improve it , I am planning on using this as a template for future email ask outs as i get more emails than numbers

thanks.

 

[gimmeyofonenumba]

here i'll edit it for you:

hi kelly,

This is Vin. We Met the other day in the Science Wing.
You sound like a really cool chick, (say something funny here if you made her laugh before)
How about we meet for some Coffee Sometime at the StarBucks on Route 101 after finals. Let me know soon!

(whats the point of telling her you can help her study and then asking her to go out after the test?)

 

[Serialized3]

Man, I love the noob move of macking on a girl the last week before finals.