Writing about my college essay

[BongDuy]

Do you think it would be so far outta it if i wrote my essay to get into a college about my experience with women and the Dj mindset? I mean, I could start it off about how i was tired of being anti social and did whatever it took to improve. heres the topic.


please write a concise narrative in which you describe a meaningful event, experience or accomplishment in your life and how it will affect your college experience or your contribution to the campus community. You may want to reflect on your ideas about student responsibility, academic integrity, campus citizenship or a call to service.

 

[Teflon_Mcgee]

A topic I would avoid.
Go ahead and write about your journey of OVERALL self-improvement or how you overcame a social disorder.

Leave women out of it completely.
There are too many ways for the average person to interpret that. And none of them good...

 

[sodbuster]

First rule of fight club,never talk about fight club. IF you mention the community you will piss off 90% of the people on the planet. WOmen will think you are manipulating[their job],men will think you are wrong and not want to listen.

 

[Prodigy746]

Dont do it kid, self improvment yes, picking up women NO!

 

[Deadly_Ripped]

I've written personal statements and narratives for four different colleges, and I've gotten into all four, from community college to two graduate programs (one at an Ivy league).

Never talk about sex or social success in a college personal statement. I agree that talking about coming out of your shell is a great idea, but talking about it in the context of success with women IS NOT.

Consider your audience. Most of the people reading your essay are likely over 40, and possibly over 50 (even 60). These people, though young at one point, come from a very different time. They're interested in finding vibrant, intellectual people who can write well and communicate clearly. The point of your statement is not to tell them about how you can now get your **** wet any time you want. The point of your personal statement is to show that you can write well, communicate clearly, follow directions, and find the creativity and practicality to impress them without shocking or insulting them.

Car accidents, abusive parents, divorce, major illness, phobias (including social) are great, but you need to be EXTREMELY careful how you proceed with discussing social improvement. I'd stay away from puzzy and stick to the context of friendships and/or other social interactions.

 

[Ridingthelightning]

Teflon's got it right, don't write it about women. The overall transformation is the bigger issue.

 

[BongDuy]

yeah, haha that makes sense. Thanks everyone! =)