this good for a email

[steelers]

i just someone to get me on the path..

i'm posting so much, cuz i just need one person to help me out.to get me on the path.. i searched everyvhere and nothing helps with with your emails to girls.everyone is telling me to search but i didn't find nothing
so is this good for an email..or what changes could i make

hey vanessa how u doin.its doris don't have much right now..but i got tomorow off maybe we'll talk. I need to get going, let me give you a call…what’s your number?”


A one-minute kiss burns 26 calories.
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[StoneColdFox]

How about..
...

Hey Vanessa, it's Doris. How you doin? Don't got much time to chat, but you just ran across my mind so I figured i'd write you real quick, just seein how you been but give me your number, and i'll text or call you sometime.

-Doris

Alright.. where do I begin..

First off..

Structure your sentences in an intelligent way. She'll most likely be a bit turned away if you talk like an idiot.. so keep it structured, but not to formal.

Secondly,

Keep it short and sweet because odds are great that you'll say something stupid.

and Lastly,

...No corny facts about kissing.. IMO that just screams out needy, weird, corny, and various other "describing words" lol.
So just don't what were you thinking? lol

-SCF

 

[Muzzlehatch]

Hi there,
I agree with StoneColdFox, that's good advice for you. Stay away from 'textspeak' in emails. I know it feels boring to do, but write it out fully, just make it as you normally speak. Its much more powerful to read that way, puts across a much more mature feel.

As StoneColdFox says, not formal but make it warm and chatty instead. Re-read it and ask yourself one question: Will it make her smile when she reads it? If you can do that, believe me its absolute gold. Unfortunately, I can't tell you how to do that! Its a knack I guess. Relate something amusing about your day maybe, or a light tease or something. I stress 'light'. When things are written down, they have triple the power of things that are casually spoken. Tread carefully!

But StoneColdFox is right. For you, short and sweet is the thing.