SS Newbie, First Pattern

[abcd_z]

I've been looking at the SS stuff for a while now, and I think I've finally got the hang of it. This is the first pattern I wrote myself, taking descriptions of a hypnotic trance and working them into the pattern. The first part of the pattern is supposed to make someone more susceptible to whatever else you have to say. After that is time dilation and anchoring. My only concern is that it isn't long enough. Let me know what you guys think.

(Have you ever been/Can you imagine being) so wrapped up in conversation with someone, that you simply ignored everytihng else? Or, if you did hear, it would be so far away, so unimportant. so irrelevant to the world you were in, just listening to the conversation and ignoring everytihng else. Perhaps you were focusing intently on the person's voice, thoroughly absorbed in what they were saying, oblivious to anything else. Just listening to what they said, and letting their words wash over you like a cool breeze. And as you listened, you could imagine a time, maybe six months from now, being in a fulfilling relationship, and looking back on this day as having been the start of it? Can you feel that (anchor) would be a wonderful thing to experience?

 

[HuuBinh]

not bad for a first pattern, somewhat variations of other patterns i've read. i'd suggest that don't use any negative words when your delivering patterns unless u want to stop the person's flow of thought about something that you don't want. You used the word "ignoring," to me, it will have a diminished effect, bc her subconsious might be ignoring some of what you'll say after that. i think its pretty good, lenght isn't a problem as long as you can bind and flow different patterns as the convo. flows, try to avoid repetitions.

 

[Iv4]

I'm prety sure it works quite well.It's recomned in the offical SS handhook as an initater in the exact phrasing(no I'm not saying you riped it ).I like using this in a sarcastic way(then again I do that with most anything)since then it takes on neg hit qualetys.

 

[iceHawk]

good use of words and all but the pattern dosent flow anywhere. U start off saying how a person can get really concentrated on someone, untill they immagine a relationship with them? in her head she might get confused, unless shes already into you and deep in trance (DDBL). Personally id break it into two well flowing patterns but that just may be my SS style

 

[abcd_z]

Good point. So how would you split it up?

 

[iceHawk]

Ok this is off the top of my head with small modifications in terms of vocabulary and ive also changed to the present tense, as I find that the subcontious takes the hints better

blah, blah, blah (intro of telling about past love)...and we had the greatest conversaion than, its hard to explain (ur struggling for words here/makeing pauses/drawing interest),but Like, can you imagine being so wrapped up in a conversaion with someone (pts), that you simply __ignore everything else.(no ?, make it a command) Like, all the envirenment around you, beggins to fade more and more, so far away, so unimportant, and all you can do is __simply __focus intently on this (pts) persons voice, that you are just oblivious to anything else but them/him (pts). Its pretty crazy, but to me, __it feels like their (pts) words just, __come into you, like a cool gentle breeze, where you __just say to yourself "I soo understand this person (pts)". And afterwards, when youre in (bed/shower/work/school or whenever you want her ot think bout you) all you can think about is __this perfect conversation. now, with me ive tried to get those , thoughts, and .. images out of my mind, but the more I tried, the stronger they became, like, I dont know if you could ever,.... just imagine all those special, exciting times in the future that your going to spend with this (pts) person,.... (pause let her do that NOW) and than I realized that,... there is something more to this (pts) person than meets the eye,and that this right here is the beggining of something really special... and I realized than, shes feeling those new, strong emotions too (pthb), and that go on and on and on till she f*ken melts

 

[abcd_z]

Originally posted by GigaloDJ
nice example

Him or me?