Online profile critique

[RecoveringChocoholic]

I am putting together a new profile for a dating site and am looking for some critique/ideas. Here's what I have so far:

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A stimulating and interesting conversation is probably one of the best things in the world. One can lose complete track of time learning something new and exciting from another person. I am always meeting new people from every state in the country.

I love to travel. I currently go on numerous government sponsored trips to the hottest vacation spots in the worlds premier warzones! Unfortunately the locals in these areas aren't very friendly so I plan on taking a real vacation sometime in the future. Places like Japan and Thailand interest me a lot.

 

[Bible_Belt]

less is more

I'd edit it to:

I am always meeting new people and love to travel, often on government business and sometimes in dangerous places, even war zones. I'll be taking a real vacation soon, possibly Japan or Thailand.

 

[RecoveringChocoholic]

revised:

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I am always meeting new people and love to travel, often on government sponsored trips to the worlds premier warzones. Seeing as how the locals in those areas aren't very friendly I'll be taking a real vacation soon, possibly to Japan or Thailand.

In addition to my workplace excitement I enjoy working out and playing hockey. I of course hit up the pub with the guys from time to time.

 

[Francisco d'Anconia]

Boring, anyone can say either. If you must talk about those things give insight discribing the situations. Basically answer "why" in terms which a woman would appreciate it.