Need some good advice

[Mr.Freestyler19]

well here we go
first i am gonna tell a little bit about me since i am new in these forums...
i am in ninth grade, popular guy, funny, i am really in to soccer. i am athletic. not afraid to take my shirt off anywhere. i wanted some advice on how to improve what i am going to say to this girl.
i dont think tht she knows the city yet since shes kind of new so i am going to say..
me: hi
she:hello
(talk a little bit more).....
.........
.......
me: have you seen tht movie avatar?(i dont think she has seen it )
she:no
me: i am going to go see it....y dont you join me on thrusday to the movies.
she: (she has no other option then too say yes)
me: give me your number so we can arrange when and where to meet
she:555-5555-55555
then i leave and call her the day bfore we go out.
it might not b the best and thts why i need some advice from the experts on these forums

 

[Mr.Freestyler19]

i mean like is this good enough

 

[eaglez1177]

Its all fine dude...just don't overthink it! Try to let it all flow out naturally; like dont just come across as a robot who is reciting lines.

 

[Mr.Freestyler19]

kk so i am ready for it and this is not what i am exactly going to say its just like a template