My Mall Pickup Video

[White Boy]

http://goo.gl/Snqal




Going to make this simple guys lol. Did a pickup vid in the mall.

I want feedback on my vocal tonality, posture, confidence, character, sexiness level (1-10 scale), dress style, height, video editing,music taste..



Anything you feel I can improve on, please leave me some feedback. Let's get a dialogue going! I'm always down for improving. :rock:

 

[White Boy]

thanks

 

[Nite]

just the fact that you walked in forever 21, god, every time I pass that store I feel like there is a force field pushing me out. So I'm impressed

The over reacting thing i noticed, probably cause I was pinged to it and saying like a lot, but it seemed like it was just a little stalling to come up with something to say. The arms crossed at the beginning but that didn't seem to matter.

I liked the video editing, I thought that was cool

 

[AlexLefty]

Yes. This is what I want the forum to be like.
1. Halloween? When did u film this?
2. Why did u edit it so much...if you really want to improve post unedited interactions from start to finish for us to watch. Though, it seems like you're doing this more for the purpose of entertaining people
3. You seemed nervous...like you were obviously hitting on her just for the sake of hitting on her, instead of genuinely trying to find out more about her.

 

[jericg]

Dayum, I wish i had a car. Btw i like the confidence, but the approach was way fast. The dress style is ok, needs improvement and the height, well you should start working out because your slightly talk and a but skinny

 

[jericg]

*tall

 

[Demonpenz]

I would def tell girls that I am ****ing bowser. Bowser lives in a castle with flames and ****. Way cooler than mario.

 

[White Boy]

Dayum, I wish i had a car. Btw i like the confidence, but the approach was way fast. The dress style is ok, needs improvement and the height, well you should start working out because your slightly talk and a but skinny

Awesome!! Great feedback thanks

a. yeah having a car is great. no worries about rides, but it does bring new worries, like whether a girl will judge you for it. But honestly it's a better thing in my opinion, some of the more freaky girls I've dated have preferred to mess around in the car than at home, lmao....

b. thanks for mentioning my confidence

c. Dress style is good! Check, I'm always looks for improvement on that

d. Yeah I need to hit the gym, I really need to fill out

Yes. This is what I want the forum to be like.
1. Halloween? When did u film this?
2. Why did u edit it so much...if you really want to improve post unedited interactions from start to finish for us to watch. Though, it seems like you're doing this more for the purpose of entertaining people
3. You seemed nervous...like you were obviously hitting on her just for the sake of hitting on her, instead of genuinely trying to find out more about her.

Yes Alex this is from waaay back in October. : ) I'm trying to improve my editing, my dream is to grow a humongous youtube channel similar to KassemG, EpicMealTime, all those. I want to mix entertainment with legitimate appraoches though, so people can actually take something from the vids

It sounded like the editing was more distracting for you, so thanks for the feedback it's something I'll keep in mind!!

I think I tried to get to know her well, she was really receptive. Really nice and a cool, sexy sense of humor, she was down to talk to me about a lot of stuff. But she kept mentioning her school haha. I can't leave that in the video

just the fact that you walked in forever 21, god, every time I pass that store I feel like there is a force field pushing me out. So I'm impressed

The over reacting thing i noticed, probably cause I was pinged to it and saying like a lot, but it seemed like it was just a little stalling to come up with something to say. The arms crossed at the beginning but that didn't seem to matter.

I liked the video editing, I thought that was cool

It was definitely tough!!! But so many cuties in there. All the girls seemed nice to, as long as I was willing to talk about clothes. lmao

So you noticed the overreacting too. Cool, looks like another thing I can work on !!! <333

A couple things I noticed.

Negatives:

1. You use a lot of up talk (raising voice tonality at end of sentences)
2. You are over-reactive
Pros:

1. Taking Risks and pushing conversation forward

Ah yeah I went back and watched, I notice that high voice that you mentioned. I'm really glad I have this on video though, so I know what to improve on!

 

[ladiesman217]

You remind me a lot of simple pickup and their pickup duke. Check them out, theyre more college pickups but still quiet good

 

[NorwegianDJ]

You remind me a lot of simple pickup and their pickup duke. Check them out, theyre more college pickups but still quiet good

The irony here is quite funny
Our dear OP originates from the SP forums I believe

 

[White Boy]

You remind me a lot of simple pickup and their pickup duke. Check them out, theyre more college pickups but still quiet good

are they a youtube channel too? I can't find them

I don't mean sp i mean the duke?

 

[Jack Wealthy]

That girl was super interested.

Feedback:
-Lead more. When you measure that tube top against her ass- it's a top btw, not a dress- you should have said "put your arms up, I want to measure this against you." Then she's doing something for you. IT's fun and interactive. Not just you touching her ass.
-Touch her a lot more. "You should be PEACH" (grab her arm)
-Emphasise parts of sentences and make the end the strongest. Sanme as above. Or intersting words (gay guy/child style) "I'M buying SOMETHING for a GIRL!" Overly dramatic. Works.
-If she says something mildy irritating or boring get insulted. Turn your back on her. Overeact. Then tell her to make it up to you. She said a lot of **** you could have done this with.

Also you dress like a chode. Might be an American thing. But in Australia you'd look like a tool. Get rid of the cap, then you're dressed cool. Actually baggy pants are kinda gay. But yeah. Just getting rid of the cap is a big +1.

 

[White Boy]

^^^^holy crap now that you mentioned that I feel like a freaking dumbass for not knowing what the piece of clothing was

im surprised she didnt just walk away wow im dumb. : )

Thanks for the great feedback and tips

yeah i hear you about the clothes i may need to get a new style. or maybe its a difference in culture

i heard the main style in aus is something like this type of style

Maybe just Sydney haha

 

[NorwegianDJ]

i heard the main style in aus is something like this type of style

Maybe just Sydney haha

I think roids are quite prevalent all over the world.

 

[White Boy]

Haha yeah that's probably true

 

[Purefilth]

you did fine there buddy. Don't go too deep focusing and analysing stuff.
from me.

Main point is - you're out there on the grind and you snatched the number.


P.s. I liked the editing.

 

[White Boy]

Thanks filth! Editing was fun. I like making videos I enjoy to watch. And I watch a lot of video game dudes, they use that type of editing. Soo....computer wise I will only get better from here

Yes! Thanks for the feedback. I love getting comments and tips from people

 

[White Boy]

please respond

 

[White Boy]

You did good bro, congrats on the number close .

You gained my subscribe, haha.

Thank you Mohammad!

 

[White Boy]

Or don't respond guys...you don't have to