My First Produced Rap (Link + DJ impact)

[Ice882]

Hey guys, so tonight production on my first rap track was completed. It's available at this link for listening and download: http://belgianman.com/songs/36/display

Its the first track that's gonna end up on my mixtape--and my budding rap career has done a lot for me from a DJ standpoint as well. I tell girls that I'm a rapper/producer and they get an extra spark in their eye. Its like a hobby, but slightly more official, so not only do you look like a busy guy, you look like you have things going for you. Check out the link and tell me what you think.

Please no "I hate rap, its all junk" comments. If you're not a fan, just steer clear.

 

[Bonafide]

****s wack **** out of here

 

[Ice882]

I would respect your opinion if you weren't being a fag on every other thread here.

Let haters hate...

 

[eaglez1177]

Im a big rap fan, so heres my opinion.

I think the beat is fvcking dope, you did a great job there.

But, like with most budding rappers, you lack A LOT of emotion. You sound so monotone, and your not rapping with any emotion. It sounds extremely monotone actually; so you really need to work speaking louder, rapping with more emotion, all that. Listen to guys like immortal technique, then you'll understand what rapping with emotion is like. Notice how technique doesnt sound so montone, boring, and isnt at the same pitch/emotion level with each verse.

 

[Ice882]

Im a big rap fan, so heres my opinion.

I think the beat is fvcking dope, you did a great job there.

But, like with most budding rappers, you lack A LOT of emotion. You sound so monotone, and your not rapping with any emotion. It sounds extremely monotone actually; so you really need to work speaking louder, rapping with more emotion, all that. Listen to guys like immortal technique, then you'll understand what rapping with emotion is like. Notice how technique doesnt sound so montone, boring, and isnt at the same pitch/emotion level with each verse.

Noted. That's been a common criticism. Thanks for the input Eaglez.

This is a new song:

http://belgianman.com/songs/37/display

It might still be a little monotone.

 

[eaglez1177]

Lol yea man that was reallyyyyyy montone...your gonna need WAY more emotion...just gotta rap like its something you really truly mean and believe in

 

[Ice882]

Ok, well if you prefer less monotone, this is one of my older, less produced freestyles: http://belgianman.com/hustletones/get_out_my_ride

There's definitely more emotion.

 

[eaglez1177]

Ehh that sounds more like someone who cant rap just shouting verses (no offense, im trying to give you constructive criticism lol) It also sounds very raspy lol.

 

[Ice882]

Well....whatever. lol.

I'm gonna improve.

 

[nicelife]

bro u sound like ur puttin on an act tbh, needa loosen up n just let it flow naturally.. maybe if u start rhyming about things that are more conscious, that u actually care about, then it'l happen.

imo, the world doesnt need another fake person rapping about gettin paid and f_cking b*tches, unless ur really creative with it, its very played out..

just my opinion tho..

check this guy out

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jq-crVkXcaw