Making friends

[Magnatolia]

Hi All,

I'm very shy when it comes to making a move so I wanted to start off by making some friends online via a 'penpal' kind of site. I know this isn't the right place to post this, but the question is more along the lines of how to write an email to someone online.

This girl was attractive but she was only looking for friends. I sent her a message 2 weeks ago. She logged on a couple of days later, probably to check my message but didn't respond. I want to know if my email was lame. I wrote it from a attraction pov.

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Hi,

I love watching movie's - comedy, romantic comedy, action, thriller. Seen any good movies recently?

My fav bands at the moment are Evancescence, Smashmouth, Kelly Clarkson and a whole lot that I can't remember. What music do you listen to?

So, what about you? What do you do for a living? Any dreams?

What exactly do you class as 'average 18 year old'? You've definitely got me intrigued.

Anyway, write back with some more pieces of the aussieprincess puzzle.

Jason

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This is her profile that I responded to:


Hi there! Im an 18 yo australian girl hoping to find some like minded people to correrspond with! Im probebly not your average 18yo..but thats never a bad thing! feeling intrigued? feel free to message or add me to msn [email protected]


Now, if this was a profile from a dating site, how would you rate my response? Any advice on how to improve my email writing would be greatly appreciated.

Thanks
Jason

 

[Social Engineering]

no responce?

next

 

[Magnatolia]

Hey Social Engineering,

I agree completely - I'm not worried that she hasn't responded. I just wanted to know what you thought of the message I used.

If my email writing sucks then the next one won't respond and so on and so on.

Could you please provide an opinion on the email I sent.

Thanks

 

[LeviathanIYG]

Mystery
Don't tell her all your likes and dislikes and life story. Girls like to find things out for them selves. Be a lot more vauge.

"Any dreams?"
A lil to early to ask about her life goals and ambitions. This stuff comes later

Just try to be vauge about your self.

Somethign like

"Hi I was browsing through (site name) and i saw your profile.

Very intriguing.........

Write me back

Princess looool"