Critique my POF profile pls?

[oneboy21]

I am a people person, I am confident and well educated person. I love my job. Besides when I am not working I like to read different stuff and get knowledge, I like humor. I like cooking. I like women who have a good style sense, who are out going and fun. i go out with friends hang out with them and just chill. I am socially intelligent and i drive fast, i like sports cars. Most of my friends are professionals, When we hang out there will be no awkward moment's, its going to be fun. I am Living in states from last 7 years and i am pretty much americanized now. My goal is to live life as intensely, richly, and purposefully as possible

I'm very open minded and looking to meet a woman with similar interests for fun, adventure and if you're lucky, maybe even some romance too!
I like to travel, it's a plus point if you like it too. I Believe in Karma.

Note: I am here to meet and hangout with people, please don't play games. I noticed several women just play games here, if you are one of them please leave me alone. Not interested in women with kids

 

[Mantis Toboggan]

I am a people person, I am confident and well educated person. I love my job.

"I speak like a robot."

Just say something like "I love spending my days around people. I'm confident, educated, and I'm one of the rare people who loves his job."

Right now you sound like this: I love food. I like people. I like my job. I like you. I like sex.

Besides when I am not working I like to read different stuff and get knowledge

I assume English isn't your first language. No one says they like to "get knowledge."

Just say that you love learning new things, and exploring....or some sh1t like that.

I like cooking. I like women who have a good style sense, who are out going and fun. i go out with friends hang out with them and just chill. I am socially intelligent and i drive fast, i like sports cars. Most of my friends are professionals, When we hang out there will be no awkward moment's, its going to be fun. I am Living in states from last 7 years and i am pretty much americanized now. My goal is to live life as intensely, richly, and purposefully as possible

I'm very open minded and looking to meet a woman with similar interests for fun, adventure and if you're lucky, maybe even some romance too!
I like to travel, it's a plus point if you like it too. I Believe in Karma.

Your writing style sounds weird. I got bored and confused while reading it.

Note: I am here to meet and hangout with people, please don't play games. I noticed several women just play games here, if you are one of them please leave me alone. Not interested in women with kids

Now you sound like some heart-broken chump. Telling people not to play games just sounds like you've been hurt a lot. You don't want to sound like a kicked puppy.

And delete that line about "women with kids". It makes you sound like a douche. If a woman with kids sends you a message, just ignore it.

 

[Poonani Maker]

Not to be discouraging, but since POF redesigned their site, I haven't gotten One view of my profile. Anyone else experience this No views in a month? I used to get 5-10 a week! I haven't been laid in a month either, but that's because I've been not horny for some reason and busy with other things.

 

[oneboy21]

Thanks Mantis
I have made changes