"I just moved here from Florida."
That sentence contains at least five follow-up questions she WANTS you to ask. Where in Florida? What brought you here? How long have you been in the area? What do you miss? How does it compare to here?
She handed them to you on a silver platter. And you said, "Oh cool. I come here every week. I love this band. Ummm... pretty crowded tonight."
She smiled politely. Nodded. And never texted you back.
I was that guy for years. Talking too much. Listening too little. Panicking about my next sentence while she was literally feeding me the answers.
Then I found 22 rules that fixed the whole thing. Rule number one: shut up and listen. She'll tell you exactly what to say.
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"The Coffee Shop Girl You Never Spoke To"
You've replayed it a hundred times. She stood three feet away, scrolling her phone. You had an opening. You composed the perfect line — after she was gone.
For all you know, she's married now. To some guy who said something. Anything.
Openers are cheap. Almost any sentence works when it's delivered within three seconds. The expensive part is the standing there, drafting and deleting, while the window quietly closes.
The "22 Rules" stripped out my hesitation. What to open with, how to keep it alive, and the one habit that costs guys more women than anything else: waiting for perfect.
sparky0000
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Looking good 
. I like that pic of you riding that bronco naked. I am feelin' it.
. I like that pic of you riding that bronco naked. I am feelin' it. foomee
Senior Don Juan
haha very nice. i like the layout, but there's a few too many pics of you and your car... try limiting it down to 2 or 3 good ones.
Stephen King is practically my neighbor...his house is very cool. Huge red Victorian with a black wrought iron fence around it...with bats. He's very connected to the community...has a radio station here, built a park...gave the town the "BAT Bus"...a cool looking red public bus line with a HUGE black bat across it. I see him around town all the time...and he LOVES Quiznos Subs.
I noticed you like him a lot so thought I'd share that.
I noticed you like him a lot so thought I'd share that.
"She Wants a Man, Not a Boy"
You asked her if she wanted to grab coffee. Then you asked if the time worked. Then you asked if the place was okay. Then you asked if she'd prefer tea.
Four questions. Four chances for her to say no. Four signals that you're terrified of making a decision.
Plan it. Pick the place. Pick the time. Tell her where to meet you. She'll either show up or she won't.
Either way, you look like a man instead of a scared little boy.
L777
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I'd change the music man....it offends my ears!!
Apart from that, cool, especially the car!! Where I'm from its just inconceivable to have a car like that at 19.
Apart from that, cool, especially the car!! Where I'm from its just inconceivable to have a car like that at 19.
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I'd change the color of the text or the background behind the text, you have such little contrast it makes it hard to read.
bearfan34201
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Wyldfire said:
I love Stephen King. Right now I'm on the 5th Dark Tower series book and reading Insomnia. I finished Salems Lot a few months ago and thought that was excellent. But thats so cool he sounds like a good guy.
Dude you are worrying about your myspace too much. Mines simple and sweet. You don't need to over dramatize the thing. I have pictures of me at parties or something not me next to my car and my arms folded. Not trying to sound like a ****.